From a85eb2d811137d715d67e6eea1d84b585d7f3adc Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Daniel <101145494+dan-jan@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Sun, 12 Nov 2023 18:11:12 +0800
Subject: [PATCH] Further edits

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 docs/docs/about/about.md | 17 ++++++++---------
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diff --git a/docs/docs/about/about.md b/docs/docs/about/about.md
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@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 title: About Jan
 ---
 
-Jan is a free, open source alternative to OpenAI that runs on your personal computer. 
+Jan is a free, open source alternative to OpenAI's platform that runs on your personal computer. 
 
 We believe in the need for an open source AI ecosystem, and are building the infra and tooling to allow open source AIs to be as usable and comprehensive as proprietary ones.
 
@@ -14,9 +14,13 @@ Jan's long-term vision is to build a cognitive framework for future robots. We b
 
 Our mission is to allow humans and businesses to own their AI, with the right to tinker, repair and innovate. 
 
-### Problem
+### Ideal Customer
 
-Jan exists to provide solutions for the following problems.
+Our ideal customer is an AI enthusiast or business who has experienced some limitations with OpenAI, and is keen to find open source alternatives. 
+
+### Problems
+
+Our ideal customer would use Jan to solve one of these problems. 
 
 *Control*
 - Control (e.g. preventing vendor lock-in)
@@ -29,8 +33,7 @@ Jan exists to provide solutions for the following problems.
 
 *Customizability*
 - Tinkerability (e.g. ability to change model, experiment)
-- Niche Models (e.g. fine-tuned models that outperform OpenAI)
-- Fine-tuning (e.g. for domain-specific use cases)
+- Niche Models (e.g. fine-tuned, domain-specific models that outperform OpenAI)
 
 Sources: [^1] [^2] [^3] [^4]
 
@@ -39,10 +42,6 @@ Sources: [^1] [^2] [^3] [^4]
 [^3]: [Ask HN: What's the best self-hosted/local alternative to GPT-4?](https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=36138224) 
 [^4]: [LoRAs](https://www.reddit.com/r/LocalLLaMA/comments/17mghqr/comment/k7mdz1i/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3)
 
-### Ideal Customer
-
-Our ideal customer is an AI enthusiast who has experienced issues with OpenAI, and is keen to find open source alternatives. 
-
 ### Solution
 
 Jan is a seamless user experience that runs on your personal computer, that glues the different pieces of the open source AI ecosystem to provide an alternative to OpenAI's closed platform.